Üksi - Free (7)
9Hey Meh, I have no idea what happens next in this story. Which is why your feedback helps! Let me know what you think should happen next, or if this whole thing sucks and we should start over.
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Hammering on the walls doesn’t help. It makes a horrible racket that reverberates through our oil container. It’s literally wearing down my fingers and hand into ragged meat. But it feels good. And it passes the time. So I guess that’s something.
It occupies my mind. Most of the people in here - there are 17 of us - spend the hours drifting in and out of awareness. Keeping your thoughts present and focused is difficult, and it’s easy to slip into a mindless hibernation. The result is a dozen or so bodies at any one time standing perfectly still, their heads twitching periodically as they zero in on sounds.
It’d be horrific it weren’t so boring.
I change up my position every few hours, or maybe days, it’s hard to tell. The difference in texture in the webs of rust is something, at least. A few of us insist on making words with each other to keep from losing what tiny bit of sanity we have left, but more and more of us are succumbing.
And then, a breakthrough.
Literally. I scrape my hands along the wall until I find a particularly rusted spot, pitted and flaking. The texture is nice. I figure it’ll be something different. I start to pound my fist against it. I never had a sense of rhythm before, but now I’d be lucky to pound out an SOS on time. After about 20 minutes I notice the metal is flexing. It sounds different. Hollow. I keep hitting. After what I’m guessing is six hours or so, a crystalline THUNK echoes throughout the room.
I can’t see, but I feel every head in the room swivel to zero in on me. It’s a terrifying feeling and for a split second I wonder if I’m about to be ripped to pieces. That fear rises as I feel the air shift with the movement of all the bodies towards me. It happens fast. Before I can react they’re on me, clawing, pushing, and thrashing. I fall to the ground and hear dozens of hands beating on the wall. Metal screeches as grasping hands rip at it with mindless strength.
It takes hours, but time is all but meaningless to us at this point. Hands are worn to claws to bloody nubs against the steel, but eventually even the metal fails. The mass of bodies swells and subsides as the hole widens and more of us rip our way through.
Outside the air is hot and dry. I can feel the heat of the sun on my skin. The excitement has gotten to most of my fellow prisoners, and their howls bounce across the landscape as they tear off towards the village. This isn’t going to be good.
“We have to stop them!” Solomon, growling at me as he chases after the pack. I follow. Can we really stop them?
Should we?
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@llandar it definitely doesn’t suck.
@djslack I second your statement.
Having not read much of this, I think the next thing they should do is hop on a bus and visit a recently restored 1950’s drug store with soda fountain counter. A nice, old-fashioned root beer float would surely brighten the tone of this story.
I’m torn between wanting him to solve his situation and somehow fix zombie-ism, or become the absolute best zombie possible, perfecting hunting people down.
@llander This does not suck! I am loving it and I’m glad it showed up as a broadcast. Whether you figured out how to do it or if @dave did it I’m grateful. Love the way that they got out of the tanker and your description of what is happening to them while they are fighting to get free was wonderful. The fact that Solomon wants to stop them has me intrigued. The fact that he seems to have held onto some of his humanity was unexpected. Part of me wishes for them to get to the village and carry out their revenge or just be the zombies that they have become. The other part of me wants to see if it is at all possible to stop the horde. However, if they can stop them, where would they go? Definitely not back to the tanker since it will no longer contain them. As well as the fact that they are hungry…hungry…hungry. Congratulations on finding an excellent way for them to break free of the tanker. Please don’t stop writing - you have a remarkable talent.
At one point there was a mention of microchips, a simulation, hearing voices, and that they can understand each other regardless of different languages that they speak. The fact that they were all put in that place with the pile of dead people with no one knowing how they and the bodies got there. Jacob was initially helping him but now no mention of him so I’m curious if he succumbed to the madness or if he is one of the ones that still insist on continuing to communicate. As well as Jacob saying the name Thomas which makes me wonder if that’s the name of the man without his forearm. Solomons name just appeared in this episode- but seems to be at the point of having a grasp on being dead- yet still wants to stop the horde from reaching the village. All of that mentioned has me curious if there’s more information on it. Is your blog still ransomed or are we able to get to it to get more of the background if this is a continuation of a previous installment from your blog?
/youtube salad fingers episode 1
@RiotDemon Uh, WTF? Episode 2 was as far as I got.
@sammydog01 hahaha, yeah, wtf indeed. The zombies picking at the rust reminded me of him and his rust fetish.
I think I’m tending towards figuring out how he can try to stop the zombie hoard, mostly because that seems nearly impossible while also trying not to get killed by the not-yet-zombies who he will (reasonably) appear terrifying to.
@dave I agree. But if they do reach the village - maybe he can find his missing arm. Or find out how he became a zombie when he blacked out, found out that part of his arm was missing and how he was killed. To which he awoke only to find out a little bit later in the tanker that he was in fact dead
@WTFsunshine YES! Find the arm! I bet a zombie named Dennis has it.
MEH, you are getting worse and worse with your offerings. What once was amusing, your recent offerings have just been complete shit. Stop wasting my time. You suck.
@mattgranitesuck are you talking about the story or the item for sale?
@RiotDemon
/giphy matt is confused
@sammydog01
/giphy Matt commented on the wrong post
Seeing as how Matt thinks Meh is wasting his time since he isn’t VMP (and has to pay shipping) maybe he should stop logging onto Meh. From what I can tell - he joined approximately 4 months ago and pretty much has left nasty comments to other peoples posts as well as irrelevant comments on a product being sold on May 23rd.
@WTFsunshine Zombie Dennis totally needs to eat human Matt! And rip him apart first! But would snapster misunderstand? Call him Matt G maybe.
@sammydog01 Totally Agree! My apologies to @snapster.
No you can’t stop them. Kill all the live ones and form a zombie society. And name one of the zombies Dennis.
@sammydog01 and @RiotDemon I just want to thank you both for reading and participating in this.
@sammydog01 I know you’ve been here from the beginning so I didn’t mean to imply that you haven’t been if you took it that way- I apologize. At one point @mossygreen, @Pavlov and one other person was participating with comments as well.
@WTFsunshine Haha, no apology necessary. The email I got from your reply reminded me to check the thread. ZOMBIES!
@WTFsunshine Sorry, I’ve had a crap summer and fallen off of the meh radar a little bit. So much reading here to catch up on!
@mossygreen I’m sorry for you having a crap summer. Hope it will get better soon.
Wait, wasn’t Solomon the one who put him/her into the tank? How is he now one of zombie pack? I thought Jacob was the helpful one.
@walarney I checked- Solomon was outside. Maybe he’s still alive since now the action is all outside?
@sammydog01 I guess we don’t know how long they’ve been in the tank. Solomon could’ve been deposited unannounced at some point. Same with the rest of the original cast.
@walarney Possibly but if not he could still be there outside the tanker guarding it from escaping zombies. I would like to know.
@sammydog01 If Solomon was outside guarding the tanker I would think the heard would have eaten him. I re-reread (with enjoyment) and he’s not mentioned again until now. I assuming he’s one of the more recent dead but past the point of having to figure out how to communicate and dealing with the change from being alive to being dead. But, in all honesty, I could be way off the mark on that.
@WTFsunshine I can’t wait to find out!
@sammydog01 Ditto!
I would like to understand how the two(?) Groups got to the tanker. If I am following there are the pre-transition and post-transition group. Was Solomon moved into the group with Jacob at some point? Did he know more then he let on? Anyway, I would enjoy a little more flashback. Very enjoyable story. More, more, more!
I can’t even write a two-sentence post without going back and editing it a couple of times before the 5 minutes is up. Can’t imagine writing a whole story without revisions.
@walarney It makes for some great ego-busting when I finish and think, “Perfect,” click submit, and then immediately find a typo or error of some kind.
@llandar You have us in suspense, is it time for part 8?
@sammydog01 It’s coming! Actually knee-deep in a product launch at my day job and some other Meh stuff, but I haven’t fogotten!